Post by Deleted on Nov 15, 2013 13:32:08 GMT -6
Ah ok, this post will be edit with new misspells if I find any.
Okay found one, I think... Here
Bay rolled her eyes, mumbling something that sounded a lot like ‘ignorant pup’ before she replied, “There was a war because of them! Both sides found out, and both vowed to destroy each other for breaking the rules the founders of both groups had established!” Bay paused slightly, “River… River was more loyal to her pack than Silas. The poor fool never saw it coming. He invited her back to camp in hopes she would join the pack he belonged to. He allowed her passaged straight to the building. In short, she sounded an ambush, and the once great pack was cast into ruin.” The grey-eyed Shepherd turned back to her path, “So if you are getting a lot of dirty looks, just remember that they have good reason for it.”
And here one...
Bay was cut off by cringing noses and growls of hatred as I supposed my scent finally reached them. They cried 'Junkyard' and growled threats, many standing and taking aggressive steps toward me. I wasn't much better, my immediate instinct turning me to meet the onslaught with a growl and a few under-my-breath insults, though I wasn't sure if they were directed to my stupidity or to the group who threatened to mess with me.
It isn't spelled correctly, and as I know, you wanted to spell 'passage'?
And didn't you mean noises, not noses? xD
Okay found one, I think... Here
Bay rolled her eyes, mumbling something that sounded a lot like ‘ignorant pup’ before she replied, “There was a war because of them! Both sides found out, and both vowed to destroy each other for breaking the rules the founders of both groups had established!” Bay paused slightly, “River… River was more loyal to her pack than Silas. The poor fool never saw it coming. He invited her back to camp in hopes she would join the pack he belonged to. He allowed her passaged straight to the building. In short, she sounded an ambush, and the once great pack was cast into ruin.” The grey-eyed Shepherd turned back to her path, “So if you are getting a lot of dirty looks, just remember that they have good reason for it.”
And here one...
Bay was cut off by cringing noses and growls of hatred as I supposed my scent finally reached them. They cried 'Junkyard' and growled threats, many standing and taking aggressive steps toward me. I wasn't much better, my immediate instinct turning me to meet the onslaught with a growl and a few under-my-breath insults, though I wasn't sure if they were directed to my stupidity or to the group who threatened to mess with me.
It isn't spelled correctly, and as I know, you wanted to spell 'passage'?
And didn't you mean noises, not noses? xD
