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Post by Athena on Nov 13, 2013 9:44:46 GMT -6
No, we still have part 2... but after that, I'm not sure how much I'll continue it. I know I'll have at least a few more pieces for it, but I'm not positive.
*Also, would you mind pointing out those typos and stuff?
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Post by Angely99 on Nov 14, 2013 3:03:40 GMT -6
One was when you spelt four wrong and you spelt it as for... I just need to find it xD
I will try to edit this post once I have found the misspelling.
UPDATE!
I found it!
After a minute or so, there was the perfect place to talk it out. I turned around and addressed her upfront. “Twenty-four hours.”
There was a silence, and Bay seemed to be trying to figure out what I meant, but found no answer. “Twenty for hours for what?”
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Post by Athena on Nov 14, 2013 9:23:48 GMT -6
Found and fixed. Thanks Angely99. ^_^
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Post by Deleted on Nov 14, 2013 10:14:48 GMT -6
Angely, you're good at this. xD
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Post by Angely99 on Nov 14, 2013 15:08:16 GMT -6
Thanks, and there was one more. I will try to find it once I get home from school if I can. ^^
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Post by Deleted on Nov 14, 2013 16:10:10 GMT -6
I think I found a misspelling or am I wrong? Here it is... "Honestly kid, how long to you plan on surviving the streets?" The stranger asked, moving closer as she went on to say, "'Cause with the ability to sleep through the rain like that and an attitude I haven't seen for a while now, I don't think your future's going very far."
Also, here is another thing. "Your one to talk. I bet sneaking up on strangers isn't exactly desirable either." I retorted, taking an aggressive step towards her as I tried to make her just... go away or something.
Isn't it suppose to be 'Do'?
And I didn't understand Your want to talk. Because if you wanted to say you are than it's you're. Tell me if you want me to fix these mistakes, I can edit your thread and fix them if you want, rather then finding this all.
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Post by Athena on Nov 14, 2013 19:03:50 GMT -6
Okay Angely. ^_^
Found and corrected KittyKat. ^_^ And you don't have to worry about it. I'm perfectly fine going through and finding them myself. I have a handy computer thingamothing that lets me search the text, so it isn't really that hard.
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Post by Deleted on Nov 14, 2013 19:08:23 GMT -6
Okay, well. I'll find more misspelling if there is.  |
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Post by Deleted on Nov 14, 2013 19:16:11 GMT -6
~Excuse my double post~
This isn't a misspelling, but here.
I shook my head ‘no’, still confused as to why she needed my name to tell me this. I also had the strange notion that I was being accused and blamed at the same time.
It has to be this way? ------> "No"
Also, this part I haven't really understood.
After both of us shook off the rainwater, Bay turned, indicating for me to follow her, so, after a slight hesitation, I did, though I could hear the guard calling, “But… But…” He was obviously still confused, but I shrugged him and it off. I wasn’t staying, so it didn’t exactly matter what kind of impression I made, so long as I could come back, of course.
This 'it' I couldn't understand, what it? Dirt, rain, water? Just saying. ^^
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Post by Athena on Nov 14, 2013 23:25:44 GMT -6
For the first part, I meant that she shook her head [In the fashion of no], not that she shook her head while saying no.
For the second part, [regarding 'it'] I was referring to the thought of him, as in 'she shrugged off him and the thought of him.'
Sorry if it didn't come off as such. XD I'm still working on it.
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